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Unseen Misery by ~Colonel-Mooseus:iconColonel-Mooseus:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open




Heart clenches.
Choking,
chest weakens,
it caves,
throbbing and contracting,
in rhythm with muffled screams of the heart.

Locked.
Trapped.
Incaged,
enclosed by bone.

Chest heavy,
heart contracts further in protest.
Lungs crushed.
Air escapes,
free from torment,
by unseen misery.
©2006-2009 ~Colonel-Mooseus
:iconcolonel-mooseus:

Author's Comments

My goal with this piece, was to capture the physicality of misery. I wanted to explore what the body itself does, when in misery. Not the mind, or spirit but the body. Our primal feelings. Emotions, pain, not in the mind, but felt in the body. Another thing was, I wanted to dispense with as much useless words as I could. Therefore, I tried to eliminate words such as "are" "it" etc. I wanted this image, I create, to be unhindered by words that add nothing to strengthen the mood or power of the poem. The picture for this poem was found whilst casually browsing the internet. Enjoy!

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:iconstormwise:
~Stormwise Feb 2, 2006, 4:29:45 PM
Ah, the all-too-familiar feelings. I recognize them well. Nicely written, my friend. You obviously know what you're talking about.
~CC :pride:
:iconlady-roux:
~Lady-Roux Feb 4, 2006, 6:05:27 PM
I agree with Stormwise - VERY accurate description...I haven't been fully miserable in a while, but I remember that it's like being punched in the gut - you've done a great job of capturing it.
:icontralakaaskop:
~tralakaaskop Mar 17, 2006, 7:42:27 AM
i like this style of writing. well done *thumbs up*
:iconbeyondmortalfear:
~beyondmortalfear Mar 17, 2006, 9:42:34 AM
my thanks for your comment. I appreciate your efforts to capture the physical pain in this poem. Well done.

--
Always throwing parties...to cover the silence.
:iconrandyzoo:
~RandyZoo Mar 18, 2006, 10:35:19 PM
I remember all that emotion... Great imagry and description :)

--
Sand is overated. It's just tiny, little rocks.

- Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind
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